by Daniel Damouth <damouth@[EMAIL PROTECTED]
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Mar 1, 2008 at 10:12 AM
Love the poker battle between Dawn and Jack. I like all the details
you wrote to create the attraction between the two. Great
characterization all around.
The way the chapter ended reminded me of some of my favorite SG-1
teasers. They draw you in with character questions and then sock you
with external plot.
"Cassie knew what Jack’s problem was—and to a certain degree, she
sympathized with it—but unless he wanted to get picked up by some
cougar, there was no way he was going to find himself a girl ‘his own
age.’"
Is "cougar" a Canadian euphemism for an "older" woman?
"They were all together in her and Cassie’s set, playing a friendly
game of poker."
Does "set" mean something like "apartment" in Canadian?
"If this went on much longer, she just might have to pull an Anya."
Wonderful!
Please write faster.
-Dan Damouth
